Formative Coursework

Formative Coursework Sem 1
2020.docx
by Kamal Barrage
Submission date: 25-Oct-2020 05:47PM (UTC+0000)
Submission ID: 134711238
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Formative Coursework Sem 1 2020.docx
ORIGINALITY REPORT
PRIMARY SOURCES
www.vault.com
Internet Source
Submitted to Webster University
Student Paper
tolkalina.ru
Internet Source
Submitted to Mont Rose College
Student Paper
QM
QM
FINAL GRADE
20/100
Formative Coursework Sem 1 2020.docx
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
A minimal plan, with Qs6-8 missing, improperly cited
material in Qs1-3 and some confusion in Qs4-5. See
the text for specific comments on how to improve. You
must revisit all computer seminar learning resources to
address the social media data set analysis, which is
worth 40% of the portfolio, so it will be very difficult to
pass without addressing this gap.
Presentation should be improved by correctly
referencing and paraphrasing rather than including long
citations, so unfortunately you lose marks here too.
Fortunately you still have time to make the necessary
improvements and produce a good portfolio with
enough time, effort and attention.
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Additional Comment
Better to paraphrase to avoid plagiarism. If citing keep the quote short, and you must enclose the
citation in spech marks and reference correctly.
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Comment 1
Manufacturing is a more professional business term, and means the same as ‘make’.
More detail on what product lines you will focus on would help here.
QM
QM
Comment 2
State the focus clearly: social or environmental sustainability.
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Comment 3
You need to be more specific here to show productive planning: e.g. company sustainability reports
2018 and 2019, or similar.
You will also need a range of external sources, e.g. journal/news articles, websites, etc. and using
library search and google scholar will help with the academic sources, but these are more relevant to
Q5. The question does not ask for where/how you find the sources. Read the brief thoroughly to stay
on task.
Comment 4
Is it also well supported with reference to other reliable sources or reserach findings? Use the whole
CARS method.
Comment 5
Is it high quality as required?
Use the guidance from weeks 1 and 2 to ensure your sources are academically viable for informing
and supporting your portfolio.
Comment 6
You must urgently catch up on all computer seminar guidance to address Qs 6-8, which will be worth
40% of your final portfolio.
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GRADING FORM: FORMATIVE COURSEWORK OCT 2020
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ABILITY TO PLAN
Graded out of 100 as per the rubric
-5
PRESENTATION
This is fed back as a negative mark
KAMAL
BARRAGE
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A minimal plan, with Qs6-8 missing, improperly cited
material in Qs1-3 and some confusion in Qs4-5. See
the text for specific comments on how to improve.
You must revisit all computer seminar learning
resources to address the social media data set
analysis, which is worth 40% of the portfolio, so it will
be very difficult to pass without addressing this gap.
Presentation should be improved by correctly
referencing and paraphrasing rather than including
long citations.